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Post by tailonkae on Apr 7, 2006 21:31:06 GMT -5
...modified my part where Hett and Kaelyn are talking....
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Post by tanzanlinnear on Apr 8, 2006 18:26:48 GMT -5
Tanzan Tailon had Hett leave his tuskan mask on the ship when they left and you have him wearing it while talking to Vos. Corrected
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Post by tanzanlinnear on Apr 8, 2006 18:29:07 GMT -5
...modified my part where Hett and Kaelyn are talking.... But they still refer to Vious as such, rather than the Emporer's Hand, or his/my Jedi name...
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Post by Starkindler (The Naked Jedi) on Apr 8, 2006 21:21:30 GMT -5
I just wanted to say that I REALLY like the way the story is going up to this point. I think each of you are doing a great job keeping it interesting and flowing nicely.
The story is up to about 18 pages so far when pasted into MS Word....and we have so far we can go with it yet.
Thanks for making this writing exercise so much fun to be a part of !!!
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Post by Starkindler (The Naked Jedi) on Apr 10, 2006 17:22:57 GMT -5
OK. I was going to go farether, but this week looks swamped for me....
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…The Scimitar’s Navicomp displayed the coordinates the beacon had returned as the fleeing ship made the jump to Lightspeed. Vious’ eyes narrowed as he read the vector coordinates and realized where they led.
“So. They run towards Coruscant?” he wondered aloud. He knew there had to be another destination. “Artoo. Be alert for their ship to drop out of lightspeed and alter course for a new jump. I don’t want to over shoot them.” The droid’s answering chirps sounded a bit smug to Vious so he glanced at the translation on the comm screen. “No doubt about it, I have the smartest R2 unit in the Galaxy,” he retorted, “please just keep doing it then.”
Sure enough not more than two minutes later R2 detected the drop from light speed and pulled the Scimitar out as well. At the far edge of his scanner range the Jedi’s ship was banking toward a new set of coordinates. His tracking signal was still strong so he waited for the trajectory to come in…
…“Noriko are you sure you know how to work the Navicomp?” Makirto asked impatiently. “We’re still too close to Tatooine to just keep sitting here you know.”
“I said I’m working on it! The spatial fractors you gave me don’t make sense.” She retorted.
“They’re perfectly good,” he tossed back, “just plug them in! I’ve modded my hyperdrive a bit.”
“A bit? These figures don’t fit a drive twice the size of yours.” She sounded unsure.
“Just do it please!” he hissed, “I’m starting to get a bad feeling about this.” He offered.
A few more moments went by then…“Ok. Got them. Puch it.”….
…Vious watched them jump to lightspeed and once again fed the signal from his beacon into the navicomp. The new coordinates indicated only one possible destination along their trajectory.
“So its Dantooine they’re headed for is it.” He knew there had been an enclave or lesser Temple there once but it had to have been long deserted. He considered reporting their destination to The Emperor, but decided against it. He’d much rather report the satisfactory ending of the mission, and besides, lately Palpitane had definitely been rubbing him the wrong way. He could wait.
“Artoo,” he said over the comm, “before we drop out of lightspeed sound the alert tone.”
An affirmative chittering over the comm was enough reply for Vious. Leaving his astromech to handle the flying he reclined his chair and began to sink into his healing trance. Five hours wouldn’t see him fully healed, but it would get him most of the way there and he wanted to be at his best when he found the Jedi. There were at least 4 of them now, Hett and Jellryn among them, and things hadn’t exactly gone his way so far…
“Hmm. With you always must things happen sooner,” Yoda had said. “Impatience helps you not. Cloud your vision it can, mislead you even.”
“Yes Master Yoda, but we waste so much time when action is called for.” He heard himself respond.
“Sometimes inaction, the action called for IS,” Yoda had expounded. “Peace, at the center of a Jedi’s actions are. Comes with time, wisdom does, young one; Peace the lure for it is.”
…Vious opened his eyes. He wondered where that memory had come from, and why now? He would worry about it later. Right now he needed to enter the healing trance. With a deep breath he once more closed his eyes and sank into the darkness…
"Execute Order Sixty Six," commanded a rasping voice. Was it Palpitane’s? "Yes, my Lord," came the soulless reply of the clone commander.
" Let the Darkness come," Senpa answered eventually. "Do not turn away from it and it will not harm you."
… Part of him was puzzled over the memories and remembered voices, but need was driving him. He needed the trance and he sought it in the darkness. The darkness grew deeper and Vious struggled to surrender to it…
"How were you able to bring me back to life?" He asked, his hands still idly tracing the form of the mask.
"Akshara grants us many powers," replied the native. "But that was not enough. Kshira, the dark counterpart, was needed for it's differing powers. That was able to restore the dance."
"We have given you a new face though," he said, and held out a black hooded cowl,"You may keep it if you wish."
“…if you wish.”
“We have given you…”
"I am Darth Vious, I was once a Jedi Knight, but now, to honor that which granted me my life, I am a dark lord of the Sith."
“We have given you…”
“…if you wish.”
“Beware the flaring of passions young Tanzan. They are but stepping stones to the Dark Side.” Obi-Wan had said.
“Yes. Yes, to Obi-Wan you listen. For once the Dark Path you set foot on, always control you it will. Dominate your destiny.” Had been Yoda’s earnest reply.
…with those last words of Yoda echoing in his mind Vious finally entered the healing trance.
…Ryn’s eyes narrowed and she turned to Makirto. “Hett and Kaelyn return,” she said, “and they have brought company.”
Makirto pulled his head out of the service hatch and turned toward her, “I hope whoever it is has a spare coolant coil lying around. We nearly cooked the Hyperdrive getting here using my sudden-death bypass. The return coil, however, didn’t make it,” and to dramatize his statement the burned out coil fell to the decking with a heavy thud. “Sorry,” he offered holding up his cryo-sealed stump, “forgot there for a moment.”
“It was worth the time it has bought us though Makirto.” She replied, ignoring his attempt at humor. “We have gained a few hours on our pursuer and will be ready when he arrives.”
Noriko came by just then and announced that Hett and Kaelyn had returned with Master Vos. Ryn straightened and said: “It seems The Force favors us. To have encountered another surviving Master is most fortuitous. Our pursuer will soon find himself the quarry.”
“Good!” Makirto called after her as she left to meet the others. “Maybe we can get one from his ship then! Preferably over his dead body?” He added hopefully as she rounded the corner toward the ship’s common room. He dropped the spanner he was holding and cursed, for the hundredth time, his failure in the hanger bay. “I’ll cut more than his hand off if I get close enough to him again.” He grumbled as he stooped to pick it up. “Never a service droid around when you need one.” He complained as he turned back to his task.
Vos was uncomfortable boarding the Fiery Jade. He’d spent so long outdoors recently he felt confined inside. Still, he was among fellow Jedi and that was worth the minor discomfort. Hett and Kaelyn were recounting their chase through the canyons with him when Ryn entered.
“Greetings Master Vos,” she nodded, “you are a most welcome sight.”
“If that is true, Master Jellryn, then I am afraid age has dimmed your vision.” Vos gave a small smirk, “Still it is good to be among fellow Jedi once again.”
From down the hallway came the distinct sound of a well-known Zabrak curse followed immediately by a warning claxon.
Vos raised an eyebrow. “And that would be…?”
Kaelyn and Ryn exchanged a momentary glance and Ryn answered. “That would be our pilot, Makirto, having a disagreement with our hyperdrive I believe.”
“He’s also the one in need of medical attention.” Hett added.
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**TAG** Tailon's Turn!!
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Post by Xorren Hedrasii on Apr 10, 2006 17:48:57 GMT -5
Crazy awesome!
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Post by tanzanlinnear on Apr 10, 2006 18:20:01 GMT -5
That was fantastic, well worth the wait
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Post by jedi12 on Apr 11, 2006 19:42:16 GMT -5
Wow really great guys
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Post by jedi12 on Apr 17, 2006 17:01:28 GMT -5
Just waiting for somemore guys
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Post by jedi12 on Apr 17, 2006 20:40:26 GMT -5
Yeah I know I'm just excited and want to see what happens next
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Post by tailonkae on Apr 18, 2006 10:40:52 GMT -5
Next Chapter starting this Friday......
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Post by jedi12 on Apr 24, 2006 16:57:09 GMT -5
yep still waiting
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Post by himiko sabbrawrra on Apr 25, 2006 12:19:22 GMT -5
Tailon.......
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Post by tailonkae on Apr 25, 2006 13:48:07 GMT -5
will post new chapter this friday...
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Post by jedi12 on May 2, 2006 19:36:39 GMT -5
Still Waiting
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